A poem :) don't know if this is the right spot though o3o

• RicochetOrange wrote on 2010-05-03 23:28
  Meh. I didn't like it. Though I do have a poem thing about how I don't like poetry...
• Erubus wrote on 2010-05-03 23:28
  Also heres another one i found in my notebook
  Loving you from afar
  admiring your beauty
  
  wanting what i can't have
  desiring the forbidden
  
  craving your touch
  longing for your kiss
• Chockeh wrote on 2010-05-03 23:32

  Quote from Erubus;27278:

  what does it exactly mean though?not the poem, but iambic pentameter

  
  Don't know the origins of the name. What I do know is that it separates the syllables. Syllable # 2/4/6/8/10 of each line are more stressed out. Like if they where more important. It's like you should say those syllable's more louder then syllable 1/3/5/7/9.
• Erubus wrote on 2010-05-03 23:33
  meh =<
  and richochet mind tell me what you don't like about it?
• Bankai231 wrote on 2010-05-03 23:35

  Quote from Erubus;27284:

  Also heres another one i found in my notebook
  Loving you from afar
  admiring your beauty
  
  wanting what i can't have
  desiring the forbidden
  
  craving your touch
  longing for your kiss

  
  
  GAWD STOP MAKING ONES THAT ARE SO GOOD!!!! (I like them cause they relate so closely to my life)
• RicochetOrange wrote on 2010-05-03 23:36

  Quote from Erubus;27295:

  meh =<
  and richochet mind tell me what you don't like about it?

  
  
  The cheesy emotional stuff. I didn't like it mainly because I don't really like poetry in general... for that reason.
• Erubus wrote on 2010-05-03 23:36
  Lol depression is a very artistic time for me D:
  and thanks for the honest opinion Ricochet, not everyone will like it, didn't even think anyone would o.o
• Chockeh wrote on 2010-05-03 23:40
  SONNET 18
  
  [FONT=Tahoma] Shall/ I /com/PARE/ thee/ TO/ a/ SUM/mer's DAY? a
  Thou art more lovely and more temperate: b
  Rough winds do shake the darling buds of May, a
  And summer's lease hath all too short a date: b
  --------------------------------------------------------------- Quatrain #1
  Sometime too hot the eye of heaven shines, c
  And often is his gold complexion dimm'd; d
  And every fair from fair sometime declines, c
  By chance or nature's changing course untrimm'd; d
  [/FONT][FONT=Tahoma]--------------------------------------------------------------- Quatrain #2[/FONT]
  [FONT=Tahoma]But thy eternal summer shall not fade e
  Nor lose possession of that fair thou owest; f
  Nor shall Death brag thou wander'st in his shade, e
  When in eternal lines to time thou growest: f
  [/FONT][FONT=Tahoma]--------------------------------------------------------------- Quatrain #3[/FONT]
  [FONT=Tahoma]So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, g
  So long lives this and this gives life to thee. g
  [/FONT][FONT=Tahoma]--------------------------------------------------------------- Couplet[/FONT]
  [FONT=Tahoma]
  Only put the Iambic Pentameter in the 1st line since I was lazy :<
  
  [/FONT]
• Erubus wrote on 2010-05-03 23:42
  Quatrain=4 lines
  Cupplet=2
  Why did you not just state this before?=<
  and i understand it a little better now except the penameter
• Bankai231 wrote on 2010-05-03 23:47

  Quote from Erubus;27307:

  Lol depression is a very artistic time for me D:
  and thanks for the honest opinion Ricochet, not everyone will like it, didn't even think anyone would o.o

  
  
  Depression is what I love about poetry.
• Erubus wrote on 2010-05-03 23:48
  bankai you messed the poem up in your sig, last line is supposed to be another lost heart not hear o3o
• Chockeh wrote on 2010-05-03 23:49

  Quote from Erubus;27328:

  Quatrain=4 lines
  Cupplet=2
  Why did you not just state this before?=<
  and i understand it a little better now except the penameter

  
  
  Taught it was obvious :<
  
  Quatrain = Quatre = 4
  Couplet = Couple = 2
  
  :D and for Iambic Pentameter, it's just that you separate the syllables, and in every pair syllable ( 2/4/6/8/10) sounds louder.
• Erubus wrote on 2010-05-03 23:53
  also not your fault bankai it was mine, TYPOS ARE A FAIL
  and well i miss the obvious crap and only see farther into it =>
• Bankai231 wrote on 2010-05-03 23:53

  Quote from Erubus;27350:

  bankai you messed the poem up in your sig, last line is supposed to be another lost heart not hear o3o

  
  GAWD let me fix it. I copied it in weird. Frikin artists are so picky. :P
  
  Edit: Win for Bankai!
• Chockeh wrote on 2010-05-03 23:54

  Quote from Erubus;27358:

  also not your fault bankai it was mine, TYPOS ARE A FAIL
  and well i miss the obvious crap and only see farther into it =>

  
  Don't worry, I didn't realize at first too xD.