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HJ6221991 wrote on 2012-03-26 01:43
[SIZE="7"][FONT="Georgia"][UB]HJ6221991 data memory bank[/UB][/FONT][/SIZE]
[FONT="Century Gothic"][SIZE="5"]Data entry I[/SIZE][/FONT]
[FONT="Impact"]just being activated with no memory of a past but with lots of intel on combat and info of the worlds technoligy and able to be questioned and give humanity a acurate awnser before they can even finish even though i can awnser a question before they finish i had leared right away that normal humans cant do that much often so i find that i have to hold back my awnser to blend in properly with human life i know that when i was activated that my name was henry joseph holly and that in my past i was a cyborg technoligy researcher and that i am the first of the kind although research was succefull in my original human life i cant help but feel alone being half human and half robotic there for i am the only one of my kind there for there is a lost emptyness in my heart the Co founder of the company Xana Co that created me james cook asured me in my past i did nothing but help people that my past person henry joseph holly knew he would not remember his own past but told the Co founder James Cook to tell me who is him that i was the begining of a new future of life though i cant not compute or think of the meaning of this i agreed to be tested for 2 years on my brain aging and ect but durring these 2 years i have developed in my brain and processed the way to visit a new demention so i can have a new life in aproxmently a month before the new year of the second year i will build the technoligy that will allow me to do this if succecfull i will enter the data in my alt memory bank if its not destroyed ending data transmision... [/FONT]
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HJ6221991 wrote on 2012-03-26 15:46
thanks guys for moving this thread i was not sure were to put it O.o
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Elena wrote on 2012-03-27 01:02
I'm not really much of a story writer so I can't give many tips in that department but I can give you a tip about presentation.
Impact font is more of a heading font, for titles or subtitles. It's difficult to read in large chunks, especially in smaller sizes. I recommend going for something else. You could probably switch the "Data Entry 1" font to the block of text ,and use impact for "Data Entry 1".
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Cow wrote on 2012-03-27 01:56
Quote from Elena;821851:
I'm not really much of a story writer so I can't give many tips in that department but I can give you a tip about presentation.
Impact font is more of a heading font, for titles or subtitles. It's difficult to read in large chunks, especially in smaller sizes. I recommend going for something else. You could probably switch the "Data Entry 1" font to the block of text ,and use impact for "Data Entry 1".
-Agrees with Elena.-
Hurts my eyes a bit.
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HJ6221991 wrote on 2012-03-27 07:56
O.o i impacted it to make it look like command promp on a pc >.> well i must admit i do suck in the imagitiv graphics department on some things :P any ways i wont use impact again on the next story i will take note of the sudjestions you guys made
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Sumpfkraut wrote on 2012-03-31 22:11
Most importantly, use paragraphs and punctuation. Not optional, imperative. Writing a text without those is like baking a bread without flour.