A poem :) don't know if this is the right spot though o3o

• Erubus wrote on 2010-05-03 22:09
  well sometimes when i get bored in class, I'll write poetry, this is my best so far i think o3o
  
  Sitting in the trees
  waiting to fall apart at the seams
  
  Crying crystal clear tears
  hiding from my manifesting fears
  
  dried tears from a broken heart
  crippled by the fear of another lost heart
  
  ALL criticism is welcome, just not too harsh please =<
• Chockeh wrote on 2010-05-03 22:53
  Not bad, why don't you try making a sonnet now ;].
• Erubus wrote on 2010-05-03 22:58
  /doesn't know what a sonnet is =>
• Chockeh wrote on 2010-05-03 23:00
  Shakespears Poems
  
  There's lots of rules, these are some I can remember:
  
  -Rhyme Scheme abacdcdbefefgg
  -3 Quatrain abab cdcd efef
  -2 Cupplet gg
  -10 Syllables per line
  etc, etc
• Erubus wrote on 2010-05-03 23:01
  i dont follow any rhyme schemes for my poems D:
  dont know what a cupplet or quatrain is. /does not pay attention in english class
• Chockeh wrote on 2010-05-03 23:03

  Quote from Erubus;27218:

  i dont follow any rhyme schemes for my poems D:
  dont know what a cupplet or quatrain is. /does not pay attention in english class

  
  lol I just put the what the quatrain and cupplet is ( abab is one quatrain) (gg is a cupplet)
• Erubus wrote on 2010-05-03 23:05
  Your talking to someone who doesnt know what ANYTHING about poety that rhymes, cupplets,quatrains and etc =>
• Chockeh wrote on 2010-05-03 23:09
  Dx I just learned last month too. Favorite so far...
  
  SONNET 18
  
  [FONT=Tahoma] Shall I compare thee to a summer's day?
  Thou art more lovely and more temperate:
  Rough winds do shake the darling buds of May,
  And summer's lease hath all too short a date:
  Sometime too hot the eye of heaven shines,
  And often is his gold complexion dimm'd;
  And every fair from fair sometime declines,
  By chance or nature's changing course untrimm'd;
  But thy eternal summer shall not fade
  Nor lose possession of that fair thou owest;
  Nor shall Death brag thou wander'st in his shade,
  When in eternal lines to time thou growest:
  So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
  So long lives this and this gives life to thee.
  [/FONT]
  
  
  [FONT=Tahoma]He's talking about a guy ;D.
  [/FONT]
• Erubus wrote on 2010-05-03 23:14
  so every other line rhymes, 10 syllables per line, what else?
  also, that doesn't surprise me =>
• Chockeh wrote on 2010-05-03 23:18

  Quote from Erubus;27249:

  so every other line rhymes, 10 syllables per line, what else?
  also, that doesn't surprise me =>

  
  Rhyme Scheme is ababcdcdefefgg
  
  So the two last one rhymes
  
  Also every 2,4,6,8,10 syllable's there should be a stress, something like that syllable stands out more.
  
  I think it's called a Iambic Pentameter something,
• Bankai231 wrote on 2010-05-03 23:22
  Everyone know that Haikus are ten times better. But very nice poem i like it a lot ;) Maybe ill put it in my sig if I have your permission?
• Erubus wrote on 2010-05-03 23:22
  I remember the word iambic pentameter, but i dont remember what it means =>
  and sure bankai just make sure people know its me i guess o3o
• Chockeh wrote on 2010-05-03 23:24

  Quote from Erubus;27269:

  I remember the word iambic pentameter, but i dont remember what it means =>

  
  An example with the first line of Sonnet #18
  
  
  [FONT=Tahoma] Shall/ I /com/PARE/ thee/ TO/ a/ SUM/ mer's/ DAY? [/FONT]
• Erubus wrote on 2010-05-03 23:26
  what does it exactly mean though?not the poem, but iambic pentameter
• Bankai231 wrote on 2010-05-03 23:27

  Quote from Erubus;27269:

  I remember the word iambic pentameter, but i dont remember what it means =>
  and sure bankai just make sure people know its me i guess o3o

  
  
  Coolio :D